Late catching up here, Josh, but there are two prime pleasures here for me. First is the vividness with which you capture and bring together key moments in the vault. Then the totally unexpected, startling metaphor it became in the end. I had to think on it, and then it took on this weight.
Many thanks, Jay. You describe the desired effect. I'll confess that this was something of a bias that my mentor, Ted, instilled in me. It's perhaps a fault of my poetry that I'm trying to reassemble the raw materials for epiphany, hoping the reader will experience something of the flash that I did when the idea first arrived.
You achieved that here, certainly with me. But I understand the issue you raise. What's the "sense of an ending" and how do we deliver it? How do we avoid becoming habitual and routine in our mechanics and effect?
Late catching up here, Josh, but there are two prime pleasures here for me. First is the vividness with which you capture and bring together key moments in the vault. Then the totally unexpected, startling metaphor it became in the end. I had to think on it, and then it took on this weight.
Many thanks, Jay. You describe the desired effect. I'll confess that this was something of a bias that my mentor, Ted, instilled in me. It's perhaps a fault of my poetry that I'm trying to reassemble the raw materials for epiphany, hoping the reader will experience something of the flash that I did when the idea first arrived.
You achieved that here, certainly with me. But I understand the issue you raise. What's the "sense of an ending" and how do we deliver it? How do we avoid becoming habitual and routine in our mechanics and effect?
Great Josh! Look forward to more poems.
Thanks, Sam! You're on roll lately, yourself -- keep it up :)